Am I satisfied with this line of poetry?

Last updated 6 years ago

First published 15 November, 2017

English Rating: ALL ages Shortest path: 5 nodes Longest path: 9 nodes Possible solutions: 9

Joseph Bienvenu

Does this line create a vivid and clear image in the mind of a reader by using sensory description? Yes. No.
Does the line use phrases that are cliche or that I have heard more than once before? Yes. No.
Can I tweak the phrasing or change a word(s) to make it more original? Yes. No.
Tweak the line.
Is the line still important despite it's slightly cliche nature? Yes. No.
Keep the line but make sure that your next line is especially original to balance out this line..
Write a different line that is less cliche..
Does the line complement the line that came before in tone and style and create interesting and complex resonance with what came before? Yes. No.
Marvelous! Write the next line..
Adjust and/or rewrite the line so it does..
Is the idea. concept, or feeling powerful enough that it needs to be conveyed? Yes. No.
Edit or rewrite the line..
Is it phrased in the most concise and precise way possible? Yes. No.
Edit or rewrite the line..
Are you sure? Yes. No.
Marvelous! Move on to the next line but make sure it appeals to the senses since this one was so abstract..
Edit and/or rewrite the line..